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trekteacher
intherealworld
trekteacher
I have noticed since the beginning of the term that your drafts have no titles. Mine don't either. In fact, as far as I remember, the only title that I've seen (that stuck with me, anyway), is november_rain's "The Clay Couple." Now, there is a good title--a little abstract, referenced in the essay, clearly freighted with significance...

Time to think about these things, folks. What do you want from your titles? Got a few good ones in mind? Want to try some out?
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_november__rain
intherealworld
_november__rain
Hey I know everyone is busy editing their essays like crazy and being concerned with their group members essays but if anyone has time/is willing to, I'd appreciate it if you guys would give me feedback on my People and Places essay that's posted on my personal LJ. It's my first rough draft so I know it could use a lot of work. Thanks everyone!
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trekteacher
intherealworld
trekteacher

My Unitarian Jihad Name is: Sister Sword of Forgiveness.


Get yours.



I had to post this meme in the community, for a specific reason. Every once in a while these meme things get me exactly and eerily right--on one other LJ I got "Sister Gatling Gun of Patience," which made me snort my Aquafina out of my nose since my patience has been sorely tested in my RL for the last few months.

However, this is what I got for the trekteacher LJ. Interesting, no? I'd say that many of my students (former and present) consider me "understanding." Is that the same thing as "interesting"? :)
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trekteacher
intherealworld
trekteacher
Perusing the Friends page (that's your individual LJs) this morning, I see not one, not two, but three posts agonizing over the revision of essays. Two things.

One: I feel the pain. Truly. Every writer has to suffer through this, no matter how long he or she has been writing.

Two: How DO you know when enough revision is enough?

my answer, for my writing, is...Collapse )

Anyone else want to weigh in?
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intherealworld
mberi25
i'm still working on this essay, but i was hoping to get some feedback, any ideas about objcetive info?? actually any comments help.
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_acheron_
intherealworld
_acheron_
Will you, my fellow classmates, tell me what my online personality is and how different or similar it is to RL.

I'm flippin sick of wondering about "my image". I was some one to bloody tell me how I come off online.

Hilarious, arsehole, simpleton, what?
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intherealworld
guidobuccelli
Damnit! I dont want to go to class today because there is a soccer match on espn. There never are matches on and this one is a pretty important match. Damnit Ok i guess im comin to class now. Wait what is this....YESSSSS! No class im the happiest ever, now i just have to get out of my class tomorrow to watch Juventus v. Liverpool.

Current Mood: irritated irritated
Current Music: Chelsea v Bayern Munich

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trekteacher
intherealworld
trekteacher
Hey all,

Today's assignment--to develop a working list of elements to focus on during your revision--is fairly individualized past the editing I KNOW you know how to do. (Right? You know how to do this.) Therefore, I will let you develop this list on your own. And yes, that means no class today.

However, be ready on Thursday for the day's task: hardcore editing and revision on ONE of your portfolio choices. Bring one complete, revised, double spaced essay for group work. If you want specific assistance from me (not a bad idea), bring an extra copy for me, and be sure that you've written on top of the draft what you want assistance with. I won't "go over everything!" but if you ask focused questions, I can give you focused feedback. OK?

Leave questions here if you have any.

Oh--be sure, please, that you all know what you're saying to each other in your revision workshops! Turns out some folks are still confused about the difference between passive voice and past tense. Let us be clear, shall we? The passive voice is when there is nobody doing the action in a sentence: "During the course, lessons were learned." The automatic reaction should be, "learned by whom? Who is learning?" That's a passive sentence: there's nobody acting.

The past tense, on the other hand, is about verbs and time. "We learned lessons" is in past tense and in active voice. This combination--past tense, active voice--is what you're aiming for. Make sure your sentences have action being done by someone, please. There aren't many occasions when your personal essays will be veering into the present tense...and why would they? Unless you're going for a specific stylistic effect, you're writing about stuff that has already happened. Therefore, past tense is appropriate.

See you Thursday.

(Hey, I just saw Andy Dehnart reading the community!)
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trekteacher
intherealworld
trekteacher
And, following up on the earlier assignment about how your persona differs from others online, let me throw THIS one at you: after this class is over, whose LJ will you remember for the longest? And why?

I'm not under the illusion that any of you will continue the LJ experience after May. That would be hoping for too much! :) But I'm curious...there's a natural "voice" that comes through on the virtual page, and I'm interested in whose voices you'll remember from our class.

Before you answer this, though, browse through the various personal LJs to refresh your memories of the posting style. Page back a few on the community for the same reason. Think about what qualities make these folks memorable--diction? Style? Content?

Speak. This should be interesting. It should also (if you need practical incentive) help you figure out what to put in your "writing and identity" essays, and also in your "final reflection" essays.
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_november__rain
intherealworld
_november__rain
Something random I was just thinking of was what my parents said to me when they were getting ready to pull out of the parking lot and go home after dropping my off here in the fall. My Dad looked at me and was like, "You're ready for this." and I was like, "I know." and we hugged. Yeah yeah, Kodak moment I know. Anyway my Mom I don't remember exactly, it was just hugging and I love you and my Dad was like, "Get in the car hun." haha. The reason I thought this could be funny is cause my Dad grew up in Sarasota, was the first kid to go to college, was really shy, and went to UGA and all his Dad said was, "Cya at Christmas!" My brothers and I thought that was pretty funny when my Dad first told us, and since we've all had to write family essays with some interesting stories in them, I figured somebody's gotta have a humorous going away to college for the first time story involving their relatives.

Current Mood: curious curious

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wildturkey13
intherealworld
wildturkey13
Just reminding everyone that we're supposed to post in our personal LJ's before tomorrow's class. The topic is to post about your online persona and how it's distinctive from others. See ya'll in class.
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trekteacher
intherealworld
trekteacher
Check this out. It's supposed to test your left brain/right brain relationship, and I found it completely annoying the first few times. Ahem. The LAST few times, it wasn't so bad.
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trekteacher
intherealworld
trekteacher
For what it's worth...this darn thing is up on my LJ. Comments welcome. I am not happy with it, but darned if I can make it go the way I want it to.
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intherealworld
mberi25
notice:
reminder to my group members, we will be meeting in the library today @12:30 for further revision of the essay. make sure you bring a copy!
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intherealworld
dversion

I read an article yesterday describing several scientists opinion about the future of the Y chromosome. It seems they believe it is headed for evolutionary extinction in 10,000 years. They believe we are begining to grow a second leg to the chromosome, forming another X. Also, several months ago I read scientists are getting very close to developing artificial sperm, from a womans egg. Yet another ploy for world domination by women. This sucks!

 

Dv-

Current Mood: energetic energetic

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trekteacher
intherealworld
trekteacher
Go here for Andy's April Fool's edition of Realityblurred.com. heh.

By the way, folks, he really enjoyed the class--he told me yesterday that you all were smart and understood the blog concept well. He also asked me to pimp to you one of his classes for the fall, which I shall do this afternoon.
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intherealworld
dversion
ok my friend had an away message on tonight and it got me thinking. It basically said:

Is it better to find out who you are, and hurt and lose your true love, or never know who you are?

I know my initial response, but after I started thinking about it, I'm not sure. I'll give my response in the morning. But another question on the same line, is it better to have loved and lost or never love at all? I'll have to think about that one some more.

Anyway, see you tomorrow.

Dv-

Current Mood: annoyed annoyed

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intherealworld
guidobuccelli
Ive got a cool lil game for you guys, its tough now but try it drunk.


http://www.wagenschenke.ch/
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intherealworld
yzxklfg
I walked in to post my mandatory response for our class and it is hot as hell outside. I’m sweaty, I got a lot of work and I’m generally in a shitty mood. Like I said, typical day at the library.

Due to the fact that someone so graciously stole my computer, I am obligated to sit in the obnoxious cubical desks to type responses. Its not bad enough feeling like the guys from Office Space (Mike Balton, and Hyra Nagaworkhereanymore) typing in a cubical all day but I have the obnoxious girl behind me who talks into her loudspeaker, because that’s what it is apparently...not a cell phone, for what seem like forever. Eventually, at my wits end, I turn around and sincerely but I guess politely asked her, “Can you maybe take your cell phone outside ‘cause we’re kinda in the library and its….” At that point her friend, some fat guy with a big red and poorly trimmed goatee turns around and flips the FFFF out. He starts ranting and raving, “We’ve had a hard fuckin’ day workin’ on these portfolios and if she wants to talk on her cell phone then she can! Turn the fuck around and shut up!”

(Internal Thought)
Did that fat SOB really just say that to me? This is the library. WTF are you.
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That is a brief synopsis of my though process before I came close to loosing it. But before doing so I realized I was in the library and had another brief but lengthy moment to myself…

(Internal Thought)
I hate this place. There is always some asshole who is more pissed then me who just pisses me off more. This is exactly why I hate this place too; I always thought about asking someone to end there call, but never did because I though this might happen; I never thought it would really go down like that.
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After he stated, "What are you gonna do" and made claer that I would have to go get someone authoritative to make him stop. I graciously asked him to fuck off and replied, “I 'm gonna turn around and do my work; that’s what I am gonna do. You can do the same fuckin' thing but you’re gonna shut your damn mouth.”


(Internal thought)
This ###### is big. You think he will really get up and do somethin’? Na…he wouldn’t. That would be a ballsy thing to do…and look at him…he’s soft…big though…I better quit while I’m ahead.
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I did exactly what I said I was gonna do and turned around and resumed my work. He mumbled something with my back to his face but I ignored pounding the keys loudly to dull his instigating babbling.

whooohhhhhhhhhhh

What would you have done?

Current Mood: shocked shocked
Current Music: Keyboards

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intherealworld
ski_friend
didn't know I had to do this, or do I? I don't know, but the essay is up, sorry for not letting group members know sooner
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